My comments are [a], [d], [e], [f], [h], [i], [j], [l], and [m] as well as the last two sentences.

Peer Review 1

Your essay may need work, but you definitely have a lot of ideas to explore in your final draft. One of the main things is that opinion and interpretation are in both the arts and sciences. You need to make the distinction between opinion and interpretation in arts and opinion and interpretation in science because they are different. There are a few sentences I marked that could be explored more in separate paragraphs. I know you are also working on adding quotes for evidence and that you may edit your thesis to incorporate the arts by way of things like diagrams. You have some strong ideas, but it just needs a little more editing and elaboration. However, you show a strong start by putting your arguments down on paper.

I hope my words my help on your revisions,

Nick Esposito

Peer Review 2

You, my friend, have a really good essay. There is not much to criticize when it comes to your delivery of your arguments. The issues present in your introduction; all two of them. First, you may want to expand on pediatric psychiatrist. I mean this as state that it is your career path. This is to make sure your reader knows from the gate why this specific field is important to you. The second thing is about your thesis. You start it by saying “pediatric psychiatrists use science to objectively observe,” but the talk of science appears absent in your essay. I would say that needs to be brought up in the essay as a whole at the very least briefly. I do not know if any of this helps, but it is all I have to critique.

I hope my words my help on your revisions,

Nick Esposito

My only comment is [d].