Peer Review 1

There are just a few, small issues. The introduction is a rough read. You overuse the questions and it generates quite the mess. You also need to introduce the authors. A simple briefing on who they are is all that’s necessary. While on the topic off authors, you quote Strawson, but do not engage the quote. I have it marked on your paper. I also have marked on your paper a place where a quote from Strawson would be of good use. In addition, a narrative project needs to be used in your essay somewhere. I am not sure what direction you want to go in for that, but I am sure you can find a podcast that works with you. Other then that, a general tune up should be good just to scan and fix any spelling, grammar, or spelling mistakes.

I hope my words my help on your revisions,
Nick Esposito

Peer Review 2

There are just a few, small issues. Number one is the gaging of Strawson in your intro. You can bring it down to a body paragraph as it is not necessary in the intro. Speaking of Strawson, you paraphrase him when it would be better suited to directly quote. It is sort of a way to prove Strawson is writing what you say he is writing. In addition, a narrative project needs to be used in your essay somewhere. I am not sure what direction you want to go in for that, but I am sure you can find a podcast that works with you. Other then that, a general tune up should be good just to scan and fix any spelling, grammar, or spelling mistakes.

I hope my words my help on your revisions,
Nick Esposito