There are a few “global edits” in my showcase writing project. One such change is the addition of a paragraph from first draft to final draft. It is a paragraph dedicated entirely to explaining aquaculture. It is pretty much a background paragraph; let the reader know why talking about aquaculture is important. I feel that without the addition, it would be much easier to say “well who cares about aquaculture anyway.”
A smaller global edit, yet a more complicated example, comes from the conclusion. In the original draft I wrote, “As long as the strategy is working and keeping the organisms alive, there is no difference if art or science is to attributed for that.” I had thought I addressed this in my essay, but it came off as a new idea. So I went back and integrated this idea more explicitly in an earlier paragraph. In the paragraph where I talk about trout, the last example was kind of built to carry this claim. With this fix earlier in the essay, the conclusion then read, “As long as the strategy is working and keeping the organisms alive, it does not matter what that strategy might be.” This was the way to fix a clarification issue.
Local revisions are harder to pinpoint. These revision are much more a “wait that’s not right,” followed by a fix. This fixes are usually unconscious decisions, at least for me. This is also usually done by reading aloud to catch odd sounding things. I can’t think of any specific examples of this because it tends to be an unconscious thing.
